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Post by sarahmay on Jan 21, 2018 1:27:13 GMT
Thriving In Dallas
Grew up here and still am, riding in the white truck my gran bought me outright, I am living
ten minutes from my childhood, driving downtown towards the twelve people I know, they are waving
at me to come meet their parents, their bosses, their unborn children. My friends are asking
if I want to see their gardens, want to kiss their brothers, want to model clothes and keep them and I’m singing
yes. Yes to dinners with well-read introverts, yes to broccoli and bone-broth when ill, yes to sex with the
journalist at Cosmos, yes to the joy that this city brings. My parents are sending long texts of pride, screen-grabs,
I’m in the paper for my style again. My brother just got his license for piloting at 20, I’m proud and
kissing him to his girlfriends delight. We are close and at home, I offer him Adderall for college. He’s
taking some moisturizer with him to try. I am petting the bulldogs of my neighbor over tacos, holding their
golf-clubs in my spare room as they show their home to move. I am calling my mom and telling her about
every good date, every eye infection, my clogged sink, my good grades, a UTI, my exciting news.
In these city lines, I am a full-fledged woman. I outgrew my mole, my clothes, my pediatrician, my virginity.
I grew into some confidence, a little debt, a career, a masters, a boyfriend, a breakup, myself.
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Post by chello on Jan 23, 2018 9:17:27 GMT
this is lovely you shared with us a complete picture of you in your happy place (home). i really appreciate that.
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Post by laurenjacquish on Jan 24, 2018 14:44:46 GMT
This poem is so self-assured compared to the hint of cynicism and critiques that sneak into many of your poems. How do you feel about it? Are you having an Oprah-Ah-HA! moment?
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Post by sarahmay on Jan 24, 2018 23:53:01 GMT
This poem is so self-assured compared to the hint of cynicism and critiques that sneak into many of your poems. How do you feel about it? Are you having an Oprah-Ah-HA! moment? haha! yeah I am feeling very fulfilled here and starting to find my stride with work and poetry and i just got some new work, so I'm feeling really comfortable in my location, which I haven't really felt before. In my poems, I think i'm questioning some underlying issues I have with large topics, but in my everyday, I really am happy and only semi-scared of everything. I am having a shift of radical self-confidence though. I am writing bolder than I did my first year of the program and am super proud of my poems and my other side jobs, so maybe that is coming out. Also, last year Betts told me to be more confident in my voice and I've brought that over to my day-to-day life and my blessings are just unfolding! Super Oprah moment of joy rn.
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Post by Kate Burnham on Jan 25, 2018 0:04:50 GMT
I think with this poem, I feel like the sense of place and home is really rooted in the self, rather than the place, so I'm not sure the title needs to be "Thriving in Dallas." Maybe just "Thriving?" Unless you were to add in some of the local color that speaks to you that can also speak to the reader? This is a really uplifting poem in it's tone, and I want to cheer the speaker on, and I also want it to make me want to see Dallas because of the title.
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