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Post by maranda on Jan 18, 2018 22:24:26 GMT
About That Magic Connection
When fast-talking infatuation forces us to late-night tell
our last secrets, we search for new magicians in silence.
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Post by vanessa on Jan 19, 2018 3:49:45 GMT
About That Magic Connection When fast-talking infatuation forces us to late-night tell our last secrets, we search for new magicians in silence. I’m digging the magicians. |
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Post by Jai on Jan 19, 2018 5:32:12 GMT
I like the pace of this poem and the compact, straight to the point
aspect of this. I am also digging the magicians, haha and silence
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Post by whoismisterjim on Jan 19, 2018 13:28:37 GMT
In its compact nature, is there a way to show "silence" (ie. using punctuation or spacing)?
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Post by Brielle Kroner on Jan 19, 2018 15:57:20 GMT
In its compact nature, is there a way to show "silence" (ie. using punctuation or spacing)? Ooh, I like this idea. To add a nice, still breath, Maranda could put "silence" indented on another line, but that doesn't eliminate the word. Maybe an ellipsis on a separate line. That would look like a cool vanishing trick too. |
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Post by Kate Burnham on Jan 19, 2018 20:00:34 GMT
In its compact nature, is there a way to show "silence" (ie. using punctuation or spacing)? I really like this idea, but I feel like it would require changing the arrangement of the entire poem on the page to show a trailing off. |
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Post by chello on Jan 19, 2018 21:08:45 GMT
Kate i dont' think it's a bad thing to re-arrange the poem because i really no sold on it as a couplet, i'm not completely convinced that it's the best layout for this gorgeous little poem.
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Post by Veronica on Jan 20, 2018 0:55:15 GMT
In its compact nature, is there a way to show "silence" (ie. using punctuation or spacing)? Ooh, I like this idea. To add a nice, still breath, Maranda could put "silence" indented on another line, but that doesn't eliminate the word. Maybe an ellipsis on a separate line. That would look like a cool vanishing trick too. Hah! I was thinking the same thing, but I like the idea of it following magicians on the same line. They could mimic that awkward silence that occurs during a stale conversation or following a breakup/insult during an argument. The line would simply taper off. |
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