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Post by maranda on Jan 16, 2018 23:07:14 GMT
This Is the Most Anxiety Producing Sex Position Annabelle says the next step, write down three positions so we can keep it fresh. Increase our desire for each other. 69 Standing Up produces anxiety in 56.8% of women, 42.7% of men. Anal, over half of women cringe, I only care about what women want. The Kneeling Wheelbarrow jitters the nerves of only a quarter— opposite arm and leg, elbow and kneecap pressed into the red loop Berber. They bear the weight of how we come back from that year you worked late— 3 days a week with your big-breasted-fish-netted boss and my summer-long-not-required independent study with my screenwriting professor— So much depends on a wheelbarrow. www.netdoctor.co.uk/healthy-living/sexual-health/news/a29379/scariest-sex-position/ |
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Post by sarahmay on Jan 16, 2018 23:44:32 GMT
SO MUCH DEPENDS ON A WHEELBARROW
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Post by chello on Jan 17, 2018 0:04:43 GMT
Sarah May, indeed.
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Post by Kate Burnham on Jan 17, 2018 0:40:12 GMT
Slam dunk Maranda. Gawd.
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Post by laurenjacquish on Jan 17, 2018 4:44:39 GMT
Oh my god no you didn't. That was beautiful. Not too many little stinker words. Plenty of hyphens.
small criticism:
and my summer-long-not-required
independent study with my screenwriting professor—>
the and my with my is irking me but I don't know how to tweak it...
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Post by whoismisterjim on Jan 17, 2018 16:14:55 GMT
Oh my god no you didn't. That was beautiful. Not too many little stinker words. Plenty of hyphens. small criticism: and my summer-long-not-required independent study with my screenwriting professor—> the and my with my is irking me but I don't know how to tweak it... Interesting point. Anyone have suggestions for tweaks? |
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Post by Kate Burnham on Jan 17, 2018 16:28:26 GMT
Oh my god no you didn't. That was beautiful. Not too many little stinker words. Plenty of hyphens. small criticism: and my summer-long-not-required independent study with my screenwriting professor—> the and my with my is irking me but I don't know how to tweak it... Interesting point. Anyone have suggestions for tweaks? How about this: three days a week with your big-breasted-fish-netted boss versus a summer-long-not-required independent study with my screenwriting professor— so much depends upon an wheelbarrow I kind of wanted the second hyphenation string to also be a an uncomfortable physical description, as well. It’s the hyphenation that actually makes me pause in my reading, but at the same time I appreciate it. |
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Post by Veronica on Jan 17, 2018 19:24:23 GMT
3 days a week with your big-breasted-fish-netted boss
a summer-long-not-required
independent study with my screenwriting professor—
So much depends on a wheelbarrow.
I think simply replacing "and my" with "a" takes away that uneven rhythm and creates a stronger contrast. It is also is not required to know that the speaker is claiming the summer-long-not-required independent study because it is the speaker's professor. The possession is clear in the third line. I know we are not fans of small words, but here it seems applicable and would be used conscientiously rather than as a filler - which I tend to be guilty of doing.
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Post by maranda on Jan 17, 2018 23:55:02 GMT
3 days a week with your big-breasted-fish-netted boss a summer-long-not-required independent study with my screenwriting professor— So much depends on a wheelbarrow. I think simply replacing "and my" with "a" takes away that uneven rhythm and creates a stronger contrast. It is also is not required to know that the speaker is claiming the summer-long-not-required independent study because it is the speaker's professor. The possession is clear in the third line. I know we are not fans of small words, but here it seems applicable and would be used conscientiously rather than as a filler - which I tend to be guilty of doing. This is a good point. |
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Post by laurenjacquish on Jan 18, 2018 4:35:21 GMT
Oh yeah Veronica I think that is a simple fix. I am not generally bothered by small words if they are working out loud.
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