Post by sarahmay on Jan 22, 2018 15:03:52 GMT
Sarah,
Once again, I am falling in love with your writing style. I think my favorite line is "In this dichotomy of wanting to be at once picked up and put down, I disavow my under-everything need." I like how you have wrapped everything up in this one line, and I know it functions more in the language area than the image area, but I really dig the way you have described what is happening here. I am a little tripped-up by the title (I know we had to use the same title as the article), but I feel like this poem stands alone solidly as if the article did not even inspire it--so pick your own title.
As for the mother-blaming, I did read it as the speaker was kind of down on/disappointed in their mother, and the reason I read it that way was more because of "mother-love" than "forgot." You could have used a different thing, specifically just the breastfeeding, that was forgotten, but you included the word "love," and that made the difference for me. Also, when I read "capital N Nourishment," my mind also skipped ahead to associate this with "nurture," and so yeah, I did feel like the speaker had mommy issues. I have no idea whether this detail is even a concern for you, but it is interesting that it is standing out to the reader so much.
Should "attended to" also be hyphenated?