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Post by Kate Burnham on Jan 27, 2018 16:02:49 GMT
I was going to mention in my reply to Sarah that "a state of complete understanding" is a quote from Larry Levis which I thought was great and applicable here, so I tucked it into my revision. It's from "For Zbigniew Herbert, Summer, 1971, Los Angeles." In my next revision I will have to slip Levis' name in somewhere, so that people are directed to reading this poem, too.
Does anyone, having watched the Brakhage film, feel/see connections between what I have written and the film? If I've failed at that, it's time to start over.
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Post by whoismisterjim on Jan 29, 2018 15:37:21 GMT
Kate,
I have seen Brakhage and I think you do a wonderful job of moving the reader to that sense of isolation and distance that this short film conveys (especially in regards to sound). There's so much layering of ariels and night scenes and darkness in "Crack Glass..." that it becomes rich territory for ekphrasis. I think the Eno-esque blips and beeps play into the middle stanza of your poem (e coli swimming...) but at the same time the closing stanza doesn't move in the way the film does. Granted, this poem is influenced by the film and not a commentary, but if you are drawing from the movement in conflict with the darkness, perhaps the visual of this poem needs to lift or fade in a simliar way. This point doesn't me that you are making a concrete representation of the film, but in the sound of the poem we can translate this static and decay rather than philisophic density.
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